Friday, July 16, 2010

Don't Bug Me - Flash 55 Friday, July 16, 2010



Don't Bug Me - Flash 55 Friday, July 16, 2010


"Dry, very dry," she smiled seductively at the bartender as she ordered her second
martini.


He barely glanced at her, with the bevy of younger, scantily clad women at the bar. When
he put the stemmed glass in front of her, she subtly poured the dead cockroach into her
drink and let out a scream.


Copyright (c) 2010 by Carmen Henesy

All rights reserved

If you would like to tell a tale in exactly 55 words, post it and go and tell Mr. G-Man

17 comments:

  1. Hmmmm. A very curious situation you've got going here.

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  2. well i sure smell a lawsuit...or at least a visit from the health dept...lol. hmmm...wondering her motives...nice 55.

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  3. Oh mine..the bartender must have a heart attack :-)

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  4. That's funny. Great idea. It reminds me of the red rubber band I found in my salad at a restaurant. It looked like an onion ring until I closely examined it. I didn't put it there, but I did show it to the manager who couldn't have been nicer and gave us gift cards. Maybe I missed my big chance at a fortune.

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  5. I LOVE it. Now you have to write a whole story to go with it.

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  6. That's one way to get a free drink...Clever 55.

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  7. How true! I know lots of women my age who flirt with young bartenders. A friend of mine who had too much to drink one night was really laying it on thick with a young waiter. We called her on it and she said, "Oh please he thinks we're fun" so I looked at her and said, "More like he knows we can pay the bill and leave a big tip". But the cockroach is a nice touch.....

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  8. hahahaha, you cracked me up Carmen, awesome!!! the bartender sure deserves it :) LOL, haha!

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  9. That's one way to get a free drink, I guess.

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  10. lovely light hearted 55!!

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  11. No lawsuit, but maybe a couple of free drinks. Funny one.

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  12. La cucuracha?
    Bueno!!
    You crack me up Baby.
    Excellent 55 Nursie...Thanks
    BTW...Loved your Zydeco post.
    NO is my favorite US City...:-)
    Laissez les Bontemps Roullez Chere!
    And...Have a Kick Ass Week-End...G

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  13. She poured the cockroach into the glass? Well, she up to no good.

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  14. lol
    excellent

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  15. Ha ha - maybe he'll pay a little more attention next time.

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  16. 5thsister -
    Sometimes, it gets so annoying when you're waiting for a drink and only the sweet young things are getting served!


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  17. Brian Miller -
    I wrote this after waiting much too long for my
    drink at a bar popular with the young crowd!!


    Icy BC -
    Well, I'm sure it took him away, for a minute,
    from his focus on the bosoms of the pretty little things he was trying to hook up with after 2AM!


    R.J. -
    I remember once, at the opening of the new Neiman Marcus in San Francisco, we had a horriblemeal - sand in the lettuce, a really dried out chicken breast, and a shell in our sundae. I didn't complain at the time but wrote a letter after. We were invited back for a complimentary meal for two. We ordered everything from appetizer to dessert and wine. The meal was wonderful - and FREE.


    At 65, I've done it! My poetry book - Life's Journey by Carmen Henesy - is out on Amazon!
    ( Poems about the things that have been important to me in my journey through life, some humorous, some sad, some that may have meaning to you as well )
    http://www.amazon.com/Lifes-Journey-1-Carmen-Henesy/dp/1451547366/ref=sr_1_1?ie=UTF8&s=books&qid=1274652997&sr=1-1


    Sharkbytes -
    I COULD write a book about bartenders who ignore some patrons while they are busy trying to score with others!


    Tina -
    I guess one should finish most of their first drink before pulling the cockroach bit - to make it really worthwhile.


    drybottomgirl -
    Bartenders are my favorite folks when I cruise
    ( 88 now with Royal Caribbean ) - but they treat
    me like their mother. In fact, they call call
    me "the American mother of the Indian crew".
    They are all so wonderful to me and some even call me when they go home on vacation so I can
    "meet' their wives.


    betchai -
    I have so often wanted to pull that stunt with a couple of bartenders who have totally ignored me while busy with an entourage at the other end of the bar, laughing and carrying on...which is fine, for a little while. Once, I
    did seek out the manager and ask if he might make me a drink.


    Eric Alder =
    Not asking for a free drink...just some service!


    magiceye -
    a little playful but seriously wanting my drink, then the bartender can go back and play with his harem!


    Pattiken -
    Free drinks first, then send the bartender to the young ladies!


    G-Man -
    Wasn't Zydeco fun. Still breaks my heart to see
    NO in such a mess after Katrina. When I'm there and driving around, so much of it remains boarded up, lost and forlorn, the city that care forgot seems like the city that all forgot. My hospital that I trained at, Charity, is still too good to let go. They are
    debating what to do with it as, apparently, the
    structure is perfectly good.


    lakeviewer -
    Yes, she came to that bar with evil in mind!


    sm -
    Yes, there's nothing worse than a woman who doesn't get her drink in a timely manner!


    secret agent woman -
    My point exactly...even the older ladies want timely service!!!!

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